Comments for Bones To Bury http://bonestobury.com dragged into this story Wed, 10 Mar 2010 10:41:06 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.2.2 Comment on 14 June night-typing by josh http://bonestobury.com/index.php/15-june-night-typing/#comment-41064 josh Sun, 21 Jun 2009 16:16:21 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/15-june-night-typing/#comment-41064 Hi Bonnie! Thanks so much; I'm really glad to hear you liked this writing. I tend to write to myself, or for myself, so inevitably I enjoy reading it but have no way to tell if anyone else does. I checked out your flickr; Your pictures are excellent-fun, but I was a bit sad there weren't more. Is this being remedied? :) josh Hi Bonnie!

Thanks so much; I’m really glad to hear you liked this writing. I tend to write to myself, or for myself, so inevitably I enjoy reading it but have no way to tell if anyone else does.

I checked out your flickr; Your pictures are excellent-fun, but I was a bit sad there weren’t more. Is this being remedied? :)

josh

]]> Comment on june 2007 by josh http://bonestobury.com/index.php/june-2007/#comment-41061 josh Sun, 21 Jun 2009 14:09:46 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/june-2007/#comment-41061 This writing was from a giant scroll I had permanently on the typewriter, and the last section was as much as I could remember of a dream that I'd just had. I've not seen 'A Walk Through H', but I've just started looking at the script. It looks like I need to work on my Greenway cinema education! This writing was from a giant scroll I had permanently on the typewriter, and the last section was as much as I could remember of a dream that I’d just had.

I’ve not seen ‘A Walk Through H’, but I’ve just started looking at the script. It looks like I need to work on my Greenway cinema education!

]]> Comment on june 2007 by Bonnie Bon Bonnetti http://bonestobury.com/index.php/june-2007/#comment-41056 Bonnie Bon Bonnetti Sun, 21 Jun 2009 06:26:02 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/june-2007/#comment-41056 Something about this vaguely reminds me of my favourite Peter Greenaway short film, 'A Walk Through H'. Have you seen it? The winding, slightly disjointed, journey-esque feel perhaps. I never tire of watching 'A Walk Through H'. The script definitely falls into the genre of 'absurdism'. http://www.btinternet.com/~paul.melia/walkh.html Something about this vaguely reminds me of my favourite Peter Greenaway short film, ‘A Walk Through H’. Have you seen it?

The winding, slightly disjointed, journey-esque feel perhaps.

I never tire of watching ‘A Walk Through H’. The script definitely falls into the genre of ‘absurdism’.

http://www.btinternet.com/~paul.melia/walkh.html

]]> Comment on 14 June night-typing by Bonnie Bon Bonnetti http://bonestobury.com/index.php/15-june-night-typing/#comment-41055 Bonnie Bon Bonnetti Sun, 21 Jun 2009 05:17:43 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/15-june-night-typing/#comment-41055 Josh, this is positively beautiful....! It flows so well. Raw. Lucid. I've just been browsing your blog and photography on Flickr. Really enjoying the stimulation and inspiration. Thank you. Bonnie (we met at Senor's house a couple of weeks ago) Josh, this is positively beautiful….!

It flows so well. Raw. Lucid.

I’ve just been browsing your blog and photography on Flickr.
Really enjoying the stimulation and inspiration.

Thank you.

Bonnie (we met at Senor’s house a couple of weeks ago)

]]> Comment on A narrative! by melody http://bonestobury.com/index.php/a-narrative/#comment-23 melody Thu, 27 Sep 2007 19:43:34 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/a-narrative/#comment-23 "A narrative is a concept, composed and delivered in any medium, which describes a sequence of real or unreal events." wikipedia entry for narrative. so nurr. “A narrative is a concept, composed and delivered in any medium, which describes a sequence of real or unreal events.” wikipedia entry for narrative.

so nurr.

]]> Comment on A narrative! by h http://bonestobury.com/index.php/a-narrative/#comment-22 h Thu, 27 Sep 2007 11:18:24 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/a-narrative/#comment-22 ...or is it... …or is it…

]]> Comment on escape by josh http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-21 josh Wed, 26 Sep 2007 03:29:10 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-21 Yeah that would be good. I loved the evocative/poetic abstracted bits totally, but writing the main story just seemed boring. Maybe because it takes so much effort to write the snippets, that it's tiring just thinking of writing bulk in that style. And maybe because when I write them I'm exploring feeeelings and experience a bit differently to a dispassionate 3rd person omnipotent. Yeah that would be good. I loved the evocative/poetic abstracted bits totally, but writing the main story just seemed boring. Maybe because it takes so much effort to write the snippets, that it’s tiring just thinking of writing bulk in that style. And maybe because when I write them I’m exploring feeeelings and experience a bit differently to a dispassionate 3rd person omnipotent.

]]> Comment on Advice by josh http://bonestobury.com/index.php/advice/#comment-20 josh Wed, 26 Sep 2007 01:09:31 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/advice/#comment-20 Hmm thanks. By penultimate line you mean "So we took of our clothes to keep them from"? The whole thing was rearranged so many times it's mind boggling. I think I will have to write using an online versioning system like subversion or that shared document thing google does, so that the history of changes is kept. It's so easy in a digital format to loose what would a few years ago be kept in proofs scribbled with notes. I agree; that line isn't fab. It originally started as "So we took of our clothes to save them from stain / from the mud and the cum and the dirt". Which still works, but after changing mud to blood, I found if that second to last line is too long then you tend to zoom pretty fast over the last line. With less syllables in the penultimate line, it really gives strong emphasis and very strong ticking on the BLOOD... and the CUM... and the DIRT. Personally I found the middle bit not terribly strong, but I guess the last few lines hold the whole thing. Hmm thanks. By penultimate line you mean “So we took of our clothes to keep them from”?

The whole thing was rearranged so many times it’s mind boggling. I think I will have to write using an online versioning system like subversion or that shared document thing google does, so that the history of changes is kept. It’s so easy in a digital format to loose what would a few years ago be kept in proofs scribbled with notes.

I agree; that line isn’t fab. It originally started as “So we took of our clothes to save them from stain / from the mud and the cum and the dirt”. Which still works, but after changing mud to blood, I found if that second to last line is too long then you tend to zoom pretty fast over the last line. With less syllables in the penultimate line, it really gives strong emphasis and very strong ticking on the BLOOD… and the CUM… and the DIRT.

Personally I found the middle bit not terribly strong, but I guess the last few lines hold the whole thing.

]]> Comment on escape by h http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-19 h Tue, 25 Sep 2007 02:34:34 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-19 you see - you seem to change style when you get into story telling or plot. EG the piece for 'creative writing 101' has a few snippets of these abstracts, but the course and blood of it is a shifted plot driving style. see if you cannot juxtapose some of these abstracts so that the reader infers a story - like placing still images side by side. you see - you seem to change style when you get into story telling or plot. EG the piece for ‘creative writing 101′ has a few snippets of these abstracts, but the course and blood of it is a shifted plot driving style. see if you cannot juxtapose some of these abstracts so that the reader infers a story - like placing still images side by side.

]]> Comment on escape by h http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-18 h Tue, 25 Sep 2007 02:32:11 +0000 http://bonestobury.com/index.php/escape/#comment-18 I am just playing with your movement and stationary ideas in the house. they are nicer than the natural/built idea that you start with. i thought the above might spark something. it's a very loose style of writing, and doesn't drive a story. like so much of your stuff. it's easy to read in these small snippets. Mostly you play with witty and interesting abstractions that are interesting to read. I would like to see how a string of these would work in a meta decription. or god forbid a narrative. I am just playing with your movement and stationary ideas in the house. they are nicer than the natural/built idea that you start with.

i thought the above might spark something.

it’s a very loose style of writing, and doesn’t drive a story. like so much of your stuff. it’s easy to read in these small snippets. Mostly you play with witty and interesting abstractions that are interesting to read. I would like to see how a string of these would work in a meta decription. or god forbid a narrative.

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